"Secret of the Arid Sands"

The Secret of the arid Sands,
Each grain of sand holds dear.
A hidden Eden in itself,
A consternating fear.

And many fated sought this green
Only to fall before,
A parched breath far from drinking triumph,
Oasis' portico.

All Men, deceived by cruel Fate's eye!
The Gold-around us-veiled.
Man's destiny seeps through our hands;
A resolution-failed.





This is a poem i wrote, and i post it up in hopes of finding some good criticism. What do i need to fix, add, delete, your help will be greatly appreciated. ^^