Can I Stop

Tags: poem

Permalink Reply by Cazzy-The Alien Bluez Dude on March 19, 2009 at 6:02am: That was indeed touching...; ▶ Reply to This

Permalink Reply by Kevin Johnson on March 22, 2009 at 6:50pm: I liked it. Maybe in the last stanza where it says"THAT I DO ALL THE TIME", you could change do to have.
Of course this is just my opinion...lol; ▶ Reply to This

Permalink Reply by EmmaS on May 8, 2009 at 8:47am: I love this. I've felt it and feel for you. I'm also a rhyme fanatic and loved this peice.

And i hate to be a nitpicky annoying person, but Rythem has no e. I make typos All the time and i normally dont care, but this is such a beautiful poem, dark and lonely but beautiful, and the picture just adds to the depth. I think it should revel in perfection instead of one little thing bring it down.

nice work though!! Em; ▶ Reply to This

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